Fanscript THe Maggie Simpson Show Movie II Maggie in Time

[Simpsonfan]

here is a little movie script that i'm working on please read and review

MAGGIE: Look, the inventor man won a toy
LISA: That's a award and he won it for an invention
KENT: Professor John Frink won the noble prioze for infesting a time machine
BART: I think we should visit him
MAGGIE: Yeah to tell him well done
LISA: We will have to ask Mom and Dad to see if it is ok
BART: Screw that idea
LISA: Bart it is the right thing to do
MAGGIE: I agree with miss smarty-pants
LISA: I am not a smarty-pants
MAGGIE: But you do know stuff, right
LISA: Yes I do
MAGGIE? Do I have to say i'm sorry
LISA: It would be nice of you
BART: No Maggie don't
LISA: Maggie, niceness is better
MAGGIE: Lisa, i'm sorry for calling you a Smarty- Pants
LISA: Its ok
BART: Bart not like apologies

FADE TO THE SIMPSONS KITCHEN

Bart Lisa and Maggie are sitting at the table asking Homer and Marge if they can go to Professor Frink's house

MAGGIE: Can we please go to Professy Frinks
HOMER: I don't know, is it safe
LISA: She will be with me at all times
MARGE: Homer if Maggie is with Lisa what can possibly go wrong
HOMER: You're Right Marge, Maggie you can go
MAGGIE: Thank you Daddy

FADE TO PROFESSOR JOHN FRINK'S HOUSE

Bart Maggie and Lisa are stood outside his house

MAGGIE: Shell we go in
LISA: Yes because it would be a shame not to
BART: And I didn't walk 30 yards for no damn reason

Maggie walks over to the door stands on her toes and rings the doorbell

The door opens and professor Frink is standing at the door

FRINK: Maggie, Welcome
MAGGIE: My Sister and My Brother are here too

Lisa and Bart stand behind Maggie

MAGGIE: Can we please come in
FRINK: Sure you can

They enter the house

FADE TO A ROOM FULL OF INVENTIONS

Maggie Bart and Lisa are sitting in comfertable chairs holding cups in the're hands, Maggie is holding a class of Orange

LISA: We saw on the news that you won an award for a time machine
FRINK: That's right I did
MAGGIE: Would it be possible for us to see it
FRINK: Sure Maggie come with me

He takes them to a room with more inventions

FRINK: Behold, my time machine
MAGGIE: Wow, its like a jukebox only with flashing lights
FRINK: Yes, and it really works and i'll show you how it works, wait here while I get the intrutions

Parofessor Frink leaves the room

MAGGIE: I'm not waiting all darn they for him i'm going to press buttons

Maggie presses buttons on the time machine like all five year olds do

LISA: Maggie; I don't think you should be doing that
MAGGIE: Why what the heck is going to happen

Maggie presses a button and on the screen it says please enter date

She enters 240BC

The time machine transsports them to that time

Professor Frink comes back with the intrutions unaware that they have gone
FRINK: Nowv kids here are the- (Relizes they have gone) Where in the name of Graven have they gone too

FADE TO 240 BC

MAGGIE: Alright, we are in the time
LISA: Yeah but what time era is this

Then they hear a loud Roar

MAGGIE: Woo-Hoo- Dinosaurs, lets see what Dinosaurs they are

Lisa points in horror at a T-Rex coming towards them

LISA: Maggie, now is the time to run
MAGGIE: Why , its just a Dinosaur

The T-Red walks up to Maggie sniffs at her and Roars at her

MAGGIE: Lisa RUUUUUUUUUN!


They all run from the T-Rex

The T-Rex runs after them, Maggie trips on a Rock

MAGGIE: Looks like i'm done for

The T-Rex walks up to her and bytes her Leg blood comes from her leg

Then some cave men walk to her and throw rocks at the T-Rex

The T-Rex runs away

CAVEMAN: You be ok now
MAGGIE: But my leg is hurting

Lisa and Bart gather round Maggie

The caveman rolls up Maggie's pant leg and there is a very big byte Mark on her leg and it has broken the skin
CAVEMAN: We help you to cave, there we will see what we can do about your leg
MAGGIE: Ok Mr Caveman
LISA: Can you walk on your leg
MAGGIE: I don't know, i'll try

Maggie stands up on her leg but it hurts her a lot

MAGGIE: My leg really hurts when I stand on it (Cries)
CAVEMAN: We will carry you to cave

The caveman picks up Maggie gently and carries her to the cave

FADE TO THE CAVE

The Caveman is looking at Maggie's leg and by this time it has got worse

The Caveman puts Maggie's leg in a wodren splint

MAGGIE: I hope it will be ok
CAVEMAN: You need clean clothes, I get you something to wear
MAGGIE: I know I do but I don't want people to look at me while i'm changing
CAVEMAN: That is understandable

The caveman gives Maggie a lionclof

Maggie takes off her t-shirt

MAGGIE: Lisa I need help taking my pants off

Lisa helps Maggie with her pants

MAGGIE: OW! My Leg
LISA: Sorry Maggie!

Maggie is now wearing only her panties

CAVEMAN: What are those
MAGGIE: Underpants
CAVEMAN: You have to take them off to put on cave clothes
MAGGIE: But if I do that then people will see what I don't want people to see
LISA: Maggie its ok, i'll make sure nobody sees
MAGGIE: Ok

Lisa helps Maggie taking off her panties

The Camera moves up and films Maggie's face, Lisa helps Maggie put on caveman clothes

MAGGIE: I feel silly wearing these clothes
LISA: I think you look like a real cavegirl
CAVEMAN: Glad to hear you say that because you put some on too

Bart starts Laughing

BART: Maggie and Lisa will look like Wima and Betty from the Flintstones
CAVEMAN: You put some on too
BART: I'd like to but I have other plans
CAVEMAN: No excuse you do it for Ogg
BART: Damn it
MAGGIE: Not so lippy now are we Big Brother
BART: Shut up Pegleg
MAGGIE: Just you wait till my leg is better
BART: If it ever is

Maggie gives Bart an angry look

CAVENMAN: So is this normal
LISA: Yes very normal for our family
MAGGIE: Yes as normal as can be

Then the caveman doctor came to see Maggie

CAVEMAN DOCTOR: It seems that the Dicosaur Byte has shattred her bone and-

The Caveman Doctor sees something mettal sticking out of Maggie's right leg

CAVEMAN DOCTOR: What is that
MAGGIE I broke my leg some years ago and it had to be operated on
CAVEMAN DOCTOR: I see you are from future yes
MAGGIE: Yes I am the year 2025
CAVEMAN DOCTOR: I see all I can give you for your leg is green fig leaves they known to num pain but they also make you run to the toilet
MAGGIE: That reminds me I need to do that now, where is your bathroom
CAVEMAN: Bathroom?
MAGGIE: Yes where people do there business
CAVEMAN: We do that outside behine tree
MAGGIE: How emilliating
LISA: I'll help you to the tree

Maggie hops towards the door and goes outside to a tree

MAGGIE: Let me know if Dinosaurs come
LISA: Will do

After Maggie had been to do her business she also washed her leg with water

MAGGIE: Now that feels mildly better

[Prune Tracy]

This is a good story, but I really think you need to check your spelling before you post it.

[Simpsonfan]

i will in future check my spelling

[The_Doctor]

Cavemen and Dinosaurs weren't around at the same time, and they certainly weren't around in 240 BC!!!

[Simpsonfan]

that is true but it makes good adventure and great comedy

[Simpsonfan]

ok guys here is the next part to the movie Then Maggie hears a Dinosaur roar

MAGGIE: LISA! Quick help me in the cave

Lisa helps Maggie back in the cave just in time before she is eaten by a Spinosaur

MAGGIE: You just try and eat me you bastard

Maggie picks up a big woodern stick and hits the Spinosaur on his long snout

The Spinosaur roars even more

LISA: Maggie, I think you made him angry

Bart shows the Spinosaur fire on a stick the Spinosaur runs away with fright

Maggie laughs

MAGGIE: Thanks Bart
BART: Hey, a big brother has got to do what a big brother has got to do
CAVEMAN: He don't like fire
BART: Yes that is why I showed it him, boy what a moron
MAGGIE: Bart. I would say your sorry to the nice caveman
BART: No
MAGGIE: Mr Caveman i'm sorry about my brother but he always does these things
CAVEMAN: Yes I know that's why we make him hunt for food

The Caveman gives Bart a spear


Bart leaves the cave to hunt

CAVEMAN: Maggie, how does your leg feel
MAGGIE: Feels a little better because I washed it in some water outside
CAVEMAN: that not water that dinosaur pee
MAGGIE: WHAT!
CAVEMAN: At least your leg better now

[Bleedin' Gums Murphy]

Well...it still beats Greatest Story Ever D'ohed.

[Zombies Rise from the Sea]

Well... This script is better and you have been practicing but there are still some things that irk me. For example, the time machine moment; I don't know who's let Maggie press the buttons and I feel like Lisa should of done something to restrain her (maybe there are some episodes where she lets anybody do stuff regardless of the consequences but here it just doesn't make sense.) The entire thing still feels like a kids version of The Simpsons and I don't know if the premise of the movie would do well in real life.

Look at the bright side, you are making a good Treehouse of Horror story; this could be something the writers would easily be able to do. In the classic era that is... I would like to see what happens next though.

[Handsome B. Wonderful]

Don't give Jean any ideas, simpsonfan.

[Simpsonfan]

ok guys here is more of the Movie

MAGGIE: IT MAYBE BETTER, BUT I WASHED IN DINO URINE
CAVEMAN: It made leg better
MAGGIE: I'm leaving this godforsaken hellhole

Maggie leaves the cave

LISA: I'd better fallow her in case she gets into trouble

Lisa fallows Maggie

FADE TO OUTSIDE THE CAVE

Lisa sees Maggie walking towards a prehistoric Forest

LISA: MAGGIE WAIT UP
MAGGIE: Lisa, its my fault we are here, I didn't know this era was so dangerous
LISA: Maggie I could hasve told you that, lets see if we can find the time machine
MAGGIE: What about Bart, we can't just leave him here
LISA: Oh yeah, BART
MAGGIE: BAAART!

They hear a Roar

MAGGIE: Oh Crap, more Dinosaurs

Maggie and Lisa climb a tree

MAGGIE: We should be safe up here
LISA: I'm sure i've read somewhere that Dinosaurs can climb trees but what ones I don't know

They hear a loud bang, bang, bang A T-Rex is seen walking towards the tree where Maggie and Lisa are

MAGGIE: Oh Crap, We'll be eaten for sure
.LISA: I have also read that T-Rex is based on movement so if we keep still he'll lose us

Maggie and Lisa keep very still

Then they look down and see Bart holding a spear in his left hand

MAGGIE: Oh look Lisa, its Bart we're saved
LISA: Don't count on it

Bart walks up to the T-REX

BART: Alright you overgrown lizard, nobody picks on my sisters but me

The T-REX goes for him roaring at him

He throws a spear at the T-REX and kills it instantly

MAGGIE: YES, Bart killed it, and you thaught he wouldn't do it

BART: Hey , this is no time to play treehouse
MAGGIE: WE'RE NOT PLAYING TREEHOUSE THE T-REX WAS GOING TO EAT US
BART: WELL HES DEAD NOW SO YOU CAN COME DOWN

Maggie and Lisa slide down the tree Maggie burns the soles of her feet on the tree

MAGGIE: AHHHHHHH, TREEBURN

Maggie's feet are very red and they are sore

MAGGIE: Damn tree and damn the T-REX too
BART: Anyway, I have found where the Time Machine landed, fallow me

Maggie and Lisa follow Bart into the Prehistoric Forest

FADE TO THE DEEP PREHISTORIC FOREST

Maggie and Lisa are fallowing Bart when Suddenly Maggie needs the bathroom

MAGGIE: I need the bathroom
LISA: go behine that tree
MAGGIE: Ok

Maggie goes behind the tree

LISA: So Bart, where is the time machine
BART: Just a couple More yards
LISA: Can't wait

Then they hear Maggie screaming and she comes running towards them

MAGGIE: Little dinosours behind that tree
BART: What the hell are you talking about

Then they see Some Rapters and they walk very slowly towards Maggie

MAGGIE: Do something Bart
BART: I've never delt with these Dinosaurs before
RAPTOR: (Sreech)
MAGGIE: What am I going to do
BART: Maggie do you have anything in your Dinosaur skin clothing

Maggie has a look and sees she has an Egg

The RAPTOR Sees it and makes a Cooing sound so do the others

The Raptor is about to kill Maggie when out of nowhere Another T-REX Kills the raptors
MAGGIE: I once had a dream About this

Lisa escorts her out of dangers way

The T-REX Kills the raptors by byting them with its sharp teeth

then the T-REX Lets out a victory Roar

FADE TO DEEPER IN THE FOREST

Bart shows them the time machine

BART: Here is the time machine
MAGGIE: Thank goodness. I don't want to spend another minute in this hellhole
LISA: Maggie. I think you may have to because its not working
MAGGIE: Damn it (Kicks the tree with her bare foot and hurts her toe) Ow, Damn tree

[Jesse Pinkman]

it's... interesting. there are quite a lot of spelling errors. for instance, every single time you spell 'bite' you spell it 'byte', which is computer related. also, some spelling mistakes are merely because you put an extra letter in or left a letter out, like when you had bart say "delt", it should have an a. but then you have "emilliating", and at first i honestly had no idea what that was even trying to say.

on the plus side, i did laugh a little at the realization that maggie was in dinosaur pee and not ordinary water, so i mean, at least i laughed.

also, you should put periods after sentences, especially when a character is talking. you have a lot of run-ons ("but joe miller, you don't put periods after your sentences a lot of the time!" yes, but i'm not writing scripts that i want people to read over and tell what they liked and/or disliked. so it doesn't matter as much when i don't put periods after all of my sentences).

all this said, i can't wait to read more

[Zombies Rise from the Sea]

it's... interesting. there are quite a lot of spelling errors. for instance, every single time you spell 'bite' you spell it 'byte', which is computer related. also, some spelling mistakes are merely because you put an extra letter in or left a letter out, like when you had bart say "delt", it should have an a. but then you have "emilliating", and at first i honestly had no idea what that was even trying to say.

Much of the gramatical errors are something I have learned to accept; mainly because he's been typing this way since the dawn of time and even though we give him advice it doesn't seem to improve his spelling/grammar at all. I may think that it's because of his alleged disability which causes him to not fully grasp the English language well...

EDIT: I know it's an easy thing to criticize but so is the poor characterization in most seasons, criticizing the same thing over and over gets old and causes your reviews to get really, really stale. Hence why I try not to copy myself when it comes to obvious criticisms.

[Simpsonfan]

i'm glad that you are enjoying it there will be more posted

[Jesse Pinkman]

Much of the gramatical errors are something I have learned to accept; mainly because he's been typing this way since the dawn of time and even though we give him advice it doesn't seem to improve his spelling/grammar at all. I may think that it's because of his alleged disability which causes him to not fully grasp the English language well...

yea, i understand all that. really, i keep bringing it up for two reasons:

-it's pretty much the easiest thing to criticize when it comes to these scripts because they're so frequent

-I'm pretty OCD with spelling errors. If I read something a friend wrote, like a homework assignment, or a paper for a class, and I see any spelling error, I'll immediately take it upon myself to fix it. That's why the spelling errors bug me so much. I know it's not neccessarily all his fault, like you said, his disability, but I just can't help pointing them out. I'll try harder not to in the future and just enjoy (or try to enjoy) the quality of the scripts

[Simpsonfan]

and has promised the next part of the story

LISA: Don't kick the tree
MAGGIE: (Sarcastic) Oh So-ry Queen of the Forest
LISA: I can fix the time machine but it will take some time, so Bart you will have to find us shelter
BART: Don't worry I found an empty cave
MAGGIE: Please, not a cave
BART: Well its either that or sleep in the forest with all the Dinosaurs
MAGGIE: On second thaughts a cave doesn't sound too bad

Bart takes Maggie to the enmpty cave where she will be safe

FADE TO THE EMPTY CAVE

BART: Here you go Maggie, enjoy
MAGGIE: So your just going to leave me in here all alone
BART: Well someone has to hunt for food
MAGGIE: But I have nothing to play with or do
BART: Well play with this little rock

Bart gives Maggie the rock

Bart moves a big stone to keep Maggie safe from harm
MAGGIE: Ok Rock, its just you and me

Maggie rolls the rock across the floor and back again

MAGGIE: I wonder what Bart has caught us for Dinner

FADE TO THE PREHISTORIC FOREST

Lisa is trying to fix the time machine

LISA: It seems a wire came loose so if I reconnect it we'll be in action

Lisa reconnects the wire and the time machine comes on

LISA: Ok we are going back to our time , where's Maggie

Bart comes back with a Flying Dinosour Bird

BART: This will do for mine and Maggie's Dinner
LISA: Where is she
BART: I out her in a cave so she will be safe
LISA: Oh good
BART: Come on, I’ll take you to her she's currently playing with a rock I gave her

FADE TO THE CAVE

Bart moves the big stone and Maggie is seen dancing naked like she were jungle girl