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    (Questions marks mean uncertain)

    writers are...
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    Mt. Doom?
    Comicshow molemanbob?
    jakro?
    HMS pinafore?
    Dylan?

    Voice actors we have...
    Clwinston
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    Baby emilia earheart as the scruffy of the show?
    D DEBBS?
    Revolver?
    HMS Pinafore?

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    Yeah, I wanted to write.

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    Ideas:

    I always pictured Mila as kind of psychotic, not completely empty. Maybe, when she first appears, she appears in a very revealing outfit, and the Nick Frost guy (aka Derek) says ''I can see your vag...'' and then he is cut off, in a reference to the movie.

    If we are going to introduce Mila in season 1, then I think we should only bring her in at the second episode, possibly even the third, so we can maintain what's going on and take our time to set everything up.

    So we have Ethan, Derek, Boss, Chloe, Scruffy(?) and Mila. Part of Mt Doom's original pitch was that he is teased by the zombies, so we probably need to bring some secondary zombies in to follow that concept.

    If we are gonna have a Scruffy, I guess he should be the janitor.

    With the Derek-Ethan relationship, should we model it on Nick Frost and Simon Pegg? For example we could use their roles in Paul or Shaun of the Dead as a small base.

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    Yeah, I'm down for writing. I've been reading this thread despite my lack of recent contribution.

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    The Janitor character could be really smart and may be one of the main sources for Ethan to seek advice. The Janitor may also appear here and there to offer his two cents even when it isn't welcome. I'm drawing a blank on the title of the series.

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    New Idea for a character

    We could have this zombie character who is a workaholic and self made man who was promised a promotion to assistant manager, but lost it to Ethan due to him not actually being "Human." Now we could have this season long arc about him trying to prove that Ethan is not qualified for the job, even if he has to play dirty.

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    I also think that the writing process should be very collaborative

    Part of the reason the 1rst time we tried this failed was because we were all waiting for someone to crank out a first draft, but if we write all the scripts as a community, we can at least have something rough that we and other writers who didnt participate could polish it and punch up the jokes more.

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    I don't know if we should have a theme song or not, but I think this would work nicely.



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    Quote Originally Posted by SIR oinks alot View Post
    New Idea for a character

    We could have this zombie character who is a workaholic and self made man who was promised a promotion to assistant manager, but lost it to Ethan due to him not actually being "Human." Now we could have this season long arc about him trying to prove that Ethan is not qualified for the job, even if he has to play dirty.
    Derek needs a zombie friend too. Not sure if this guy sounds right, but it could fit the difficult human and zombies relationships plot, if we want to do it. Or it could be some other guy or girl.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Agent Polar View Post
    Derek needs a zombie friend too. Not sure if this guy sounds right, but it could fit the difficult human and zombies relationships plot, if we want to do it. Or it could be some other guy or girl.
    oh, Derek is friends with everyone in the office, he just has known Ethan since childhood and his bond is something special

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    I was thinking the same thing about the writer collaboration. Now, how would we be able to do it? As soon as we get all of the characters finished, I was thinking someone could write up a leavebehind so that we all have something that tells us about the show and the characters. That way we can look to it if we are ever stuck writing a particular character. We're also going to need someone to design the characters and we'll eventually need one or multiple animators. Now, we also need to try to start outlining the first season story arc after all the characters have been explained. We should probably have the writers collaborate on that as well. I was thinking the storyline structure for the first season could go a little something like this:

    Episode 1: introduce characters (standalone episode)
    Episodes 2-5: introduce main storyline and other sub-plots
    Episode 6: resolve all storylines

    That's just a little something I had come up with. Please feel free to comment on it and make your own suggestions. After all, this is a collaborative project.
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    Squeaky Voiced Teen and I will write together for this as well cuz we don't have time to write on our own.

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    Quote Originally Posted by clwinston View Post
    I was thinking the same thing about the writer collaboration. Now, how would we be able to do it? As soon as we get all of the characters finished, I was thinking someone could write up a leavebehind so that we all have something that tells us about the show and the characters. That way we can look to it if we are ever stuck writing a particular character. We're also going to need someone to design the characters and we'll eventually need one or multiple animators. Now, we also need to try to start outlining the first season story arc after all the characters have been explained. We should probably have the writers collaborate on that as well. I was thinking the storyline structure for the first season could go a little something like this:

    Episode 1: introduce characters (standalone episode)
    Episodes 2-5: introduce main storyline and other sub-plots
    Episode 6: resolve all storylines

    That's just a little something I had come up with. Please feel free to comment on it and make your own suggestions. After all, this is a collaborative project.
    Sounds good. here are the storylines we established so far...

    1. the Ethan, Chloe and Mila love triangle
    2. Richard trying to regain his fortune by cheap schemes
    3. The rival character (named Dylan) Trying show Richard that Ethan is incompetent for the role of assistant manager.
    4. Ethan being made fun of by his Zombie co-workers (Possibly because of Dylan?)

    The best way to come up with more story arcs is to come up with new characters so the stories are character based instead of situation humor (we still should have alot of this) so lets get cracking! lets start by doing what ray jay suggested, by listing office character stereotypes and using that as a loose foundation for the character.

    EDIT: also for a name... hmm.... post apocoffice? nope... damn this is hard!

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    Was thinking of how to open the thing, came up with something, probably bad, but that's why this is a sounding board.

    Ethan pops in to Boss (Richard?)'s office.
    Ethan: There's a kid outside, talking about an interview, you still hiring?
    Boss: I'm keeping my options open.
    Ethan: Well, be nice to him, it's tough out there, they'll eat him alive.
    Boss: It'll be fine, Ethan. Don't worry about him.

    Ethan walks away, over to his desk.

    Ethan: Fresh meat.

    A young man walks into The Boss' office behind Ethan. We turn and see over Ethan's shoulder a zombie behind a desk, Derek. He growls in approval.

    Just something.

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    That above opening seems interesting. I knocked up something myself:

    We zoom into the office where all of the workers are facing the boss' desk with their backs to us.

    BOSS: Now, uh, because of this recent... virus... that has been going around, there have been some, uh, budget cuts. Now, uh, those who have been... affected ...by the virus will no longer have a dental plan. (groans from the workers) And those who have been affected by the virus will no longer be able to benefit from the drugs program. (more groans) Or the company health insurance. (groans) Now, those who have not been affacted will no longer have... (pauses, then coughs, then pauses) Get back to work.

    Everyone turns around to reveal that they are zombies.

    Yeah, just something, like the one above it probably sucks. For the title, how about 'Job Zombies'? Here's the defenition:

    When you reach the point where you realize it's the same old thing over and over again, day in and day out, week after week, month after month, year after...
    After three months at his new job, Tom realized he was becoming a job zombie.

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    Both those scenes are good and express some really funny ideas. As Sir oinks alot stated, we need to come up with more characters for each episode in which the storyline is acknowledged (which is the majority of the episodes). We also need to get started on outlining the story arc for this first season so we know what direction we're headed in instead of coming up with things as we write. So, instead of focusing on the scenes, let's focus on the storyline.

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    Well. We do got the whole Female with a cure thing, maybe we can have an all human army that appears later in the season to shake things up (preferably the season finale).

    I'm thinking that his romance with a zombie and the other females like cure and crush on the main character can reach a breaking point midway through.

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    Quote Originally Posted by clwinston View Post
    The Janitor character could be really smart and may be one of the main sources for Ethan to seek advice. The Janitor may also appear here and there to offer his two cents even when it isn't welcome. I'm drawing a blank on the title of the series.
    A main writting tool used in television is to inform the viewers of 'in universe rules' by teaching the main character. Like how Fry was taught by Leela, Bender, Professor, ect...

    The Janitor could be the guy who shares his knowledge, sometimes he could be wrong for comedic reasons. What if we make the Janitor Haitian? That could be the reason why he has knowledge of zombies - but sometimes a bit inaccurate.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Jrock241 View Post
    A main writting tool used in television is to inform the viewers of 'in universe rules' by teaching the main character. Like how Fry was taught by Leela, Bender, Professor, ect...

    The Janitor could be the guy who shares his knowledge, sometimes he could be wrong for comedic reasons. What if we make the Janitor Haitian? That could be the reason why he has knowledge of zombies - but sometimes a bit inaccurate.
    I like that idea. I say we go with it.

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    The human army idea is interesting, but maybe it would be better to try and limit the number of humans (we already have three).

    Here's how I think the plots may go per episode:

    EP 1: Introduce everyone. Ethan has not revealed his love for Chloe to her yet.

    EP 2: A bit like ep 1, also Ethan decided to make a move with Chloe, it goes right. Ethan invites Chloe to Ethan's apartment, she says yes. When she comes to apartment, it's a bit akward, then Mila appears.

    Just an idea but I need to go somewhere now, I'll finish this later

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    Before we do anything else, what about the company? What's the name of it and what do they do? It might be incidental stuff, but I think we ought to get it established.

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    The company should be an insurance company that screws a nation over for not having coverage on "Zombie Infestations".

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    OR...

    we could have that insurance company have insurance on ONLY zombie infestations and the company is now officially broke. It could be a good testament to Richard how he tries to rip people off then it backfires. either one.

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    So how long are we going to make the episodes?
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    Ummm... 20 mins? Maybe less?

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    We were talking about making them at least 5 minutes in length. That way we can get to the jokes and actually focus on establishing both the characters and the various plots we're coming up with.

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    And it'd not be too much of a strain on anyone.

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    Oh ok, great.

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    mmmm 5 is too short... what about 8?

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    I'm guessing it should be 10 minutes, that way we can focus on both the stories and the jokes. 5 minutes just feels like there isn't enough time to get to both the jokes and the story. It has to be one of the other.

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