My Simpsons Episode Ideas

[Dances In Underwear]

Watch out, Mike Scully!

This is even more awful, which is quite impressive.

Constructive criticism:
Firstly, even if you removed the constant swearing which would not be in a Simpsons episode, the characters are still acting so out of character. Marge wouldn't call people a dickhead at all, and considering this is her grandchild, thats even more ridiculous.

[deshem]

Ridiculously short and badly characterized act. I'm sorry, my friend, you're just not cut out to make these. I feel for you, I do.

[neoballmon]

oops. I thought i replaced dickhead with idiot

EDIT: Damn i missed that one

[Dances In Underwear]

Actually you did. But my point remains valid, and also applies to all the other swearing characters.

[Paul]

Act 2 sucked horribly, I hope you give up forever.

[neoballmon]

I might just scrap this script and make a more in-character one

Please tell me theres nothing whong with act 3 (or what I have written anyway)

At Barts funeral, the church is full with the whole family and lots of well known townspeople with Jessica Lovejoy returning as the reverend reading out the eulogy.

[Dances In Underwear]

I might just scrap this script and make a more in-character one

Your best idea yet

[neoballmon]

thanks

maybe to make it a bit better, someone else give me the title of the episode and i will work off of that

[Clarence]

Wait until season 22 to post this, then people will like it more.

[Butters]

This script accurately potrays how OOC you're characters are:

Homer: Hey, Flanders! Can I borrow you're bible. I'm wishing to study upon the Book of Job.
Ned Flanders: Grrr! (Ned slams the door on Homer.)
Ned Flanders: Oh, fucking Simpson! He's such a fuck.
Rod: (wearing "hip" clothes) Yo, Daddy, I just busted a cap in this nigga's ass 'cause he insulted my homies!
Ned Flanders: Good work, son!
(Cut to Simpsons Home.)
(Homer walks in humming a pleasant tune.)
Homer: Oh, I can't wait until I get in and greet my beautiful wife and marvelous kids!
(Homer walks into the Living Room as Marge is on the couch.)
Homer: Hey, sweetie!
Marge: Whatever. "Big Brother" is on, so shut the hell up, you over-weight individual.
Homer: Oh, sorry, Marge. I'll leave you be until your programme is finished.
(Homer cheerfully walks away.)
(Cut to Lisa's room)
(Lisa, dressed like a slut, is in her bedroom with two he-men boys : Martin and Ralph.)
Lisa: Okay, fellas, who wants to be back and who wants to be front?
Ralph: (in a really deep voice) I wanna be front!
Martin: (in a really deep voice) Shut the hell up! It's me!
(the two start to have a wrestling match, as Lisa lights up a cigarette. Homer walks in.)
Homer: Hello, my daughter.
Lisa: Piss off!
Homer: Do you need any help with your homework?
Lisa: School is for fags! Fags like you.
Homer: Goodness gracious! I'll see if young Bart needs my assistance.
(Cut to Bart's room)
(Bart is wearing Milhouse glasses and is reading books. He's bedroom is practically a library.)
Homer: Hello, son!
Bart: Hiya, dad. Did you enjoy your day at work?
Homer: Certainly, my lad.
Bart: I wish I could talk for longer, but I'm reading about the Advanced Theories of Pi.
Homer: Oh, let me know how that one turns out. My graduation and college degree can only take my so far.
Marge: (yelling up stairs) FAT ASS, MY SISTER'S ARE HERE!
Homer: Oh, boy!
(Kitchen)
(Homer runs in to two super models.)
Homer: Hello, Patty and Selma!
Patty + Selma: Hiya, Homer!
Homer: So, what you been up to?
Patty: We started an anti-smoking campaign.
Homer: Excellent work!
Selma: And then our husbands took us to Las Vegas.
Homer: What straping young men.
Patty: Well, sorry, Homer, we must be on our way now.
Selma: Hope we'll see you again some time.
Homer: Bye! It was nice talking to you.

[Paul]

Oh, this thread was actually pretty funny until Butters posted.

[neoballmon]

That was actualy pretty good but I get what you are saying.


There is 1 line I pretty much completely changed

BEFORE:Liendon goes up and kicks him in the nuts until he wakes up

AFTER: Liendon goes up and blocks his nose until he wakes up

[Butters]

Oh, this thread was actually pretty funny until Butters posted.

Yes.

There is 1 line I pretty much completely changed

BEFORE:Liendon goes up and kicks him in the nuts until he wakes up

AFTER: Liendon goes up and blocks his nose until he wakes up

Oh, well, now that you've changed it, it's the best idea we've ever seen!

[Jake]

Keep going this is so bad it's hilarious.

[Alpha]

This is the funniest fanfic I've ever read... even better than The Bender and Leela Show!

[Clarence]

These threads wen't funny, it's very sad.

[deshem]

Yeah, don't laugh. Pity.

[John]

good stuff

[neoballmon]

Feel free to insult it as much as you want. I dont care anymore. After everything on Page 1, nothing can offend m anymore

[Paul]

mr. simpson said he liked your work, you idiot.

...but then again, he can't be trusted, because he doesn't like Arrested Development.

[neoballmon]

i was talking to everyone else

[Dr. Bartley]

I read the first couple of scenes and vomitted in disgust. Worst. Anything. Ever. Seriously.

so it's even more worse than my Futurama Spin-Off "The Leela and Bender Show" I Wrote?

This is the funniest fanfic I've ever read... even better than The Bender and Leela Show!

WOO-HOO! I'm not the worst writer anymore

[neoballmon]

yep. The wooden spoon for writing has just been handed to me

[neoballmon]

Someone give me a title and I will make up an episode from that.

[Dr. Bartley]

The bus that couldn’t slow down :laugh:

[neoballmon]

Ok. Consider it done

[vox]

Someone give me a title and I will make up an episode from that.

Ugh, no. That is the absolute worst way to write an episode idea. The title should be the last thing you think of.

And your attempt at a script was pretty poor, especially since the idea that it was based on was mediocre to begin with. Try writing some ideas and getting feedback on them before you start scripting again, and when you do start scripting, remember to keep the characters in character. Without concrete characterization, your episode will fail to be funny. And don't write a line, and then think of a character to say it. Write for your characters, make sure their actions and words reflect their personality.

[neoballmon]

Ok. Thanks. I will write some paragraph Ideas.

Write for your characters.

I do that anyway

It is hard for me to get ideas, so I will add them when I get them.

[OKC]

Everyone's a critic don't you think? They make people afraid of stepping out, so I want to say "nice work on those script, it just needs a little fine tuning".

[neoballmon]

Thanks

I forgot to add this when I wrote it

LABF19 – Treehouse of Horror XXI (468th Episode) - Written by neoballmon - Directed By Mark Kirkland
Confirmed Airdate: November 7th, 2010
Part 1 - Iraqi Nazi: The Simpsons go on a vacation to Iraq but when they get there, the airport is bombed. Suddenly, Sudan Hussein comes out of a nearby cave and hunts the family down because they are the only Americans there. Everyone runs as much as they can until Bart gets shot in the arm and they slow down. Sudan catches Marge and kills her. The four remaining Simpsons find a private jet and they go home.